All this week we are holding a contest for the chance for you to win a trip to Brazil!
This all-inclusive trip will even pay for your flight and transport you to and from the airport :)
This all-inclusive trip will even pay for your flight and transport you to and from the airport :)
Bogged down at work? Cant ever get free? Stressed to the max? Children driving you crazy?
If you feel like you need a trip really bad, this is your chance to tell us why. We want everyone to write a one page paper explaining exactly why you need to go on a trip so bad! We will read everyone's paper and give our trip out to the person that sounds like they need it the most. We want to help those who are really in need of a vacation!!
You could be here!
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Okay, fantastic idea, but missing a LOT of content and what you do have is awkward. Your second paragraph should be your lead in. Pictures is too big for post.
ReplyDeleteContest needs details. Where in Brazil? How long? Where am I staying? What does the trip include? Who is eligible? When does the contest begin/end? When/where is the winner announced? Etc.
You have a link to your commercial on YouTube, but there are no videos posted there.
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